Ruled by Intellect or Emotion? Tips on Word Choice #11

Freshman college girls between classes. By standards of the time, they would have been considered very "dressed up." Memphis, Tennessee, 1973 (Photo credit: Wikipedia)

Some words/phrases can induce fairly specific responses in readers. As writers, we all know this, but do we use the power of emotion in our work?

For these few weeks, I’m looking at something subjective: how to choose between emotional and intellectual words for effect. You won’t always agree with me, of course; you’re writers. But, hopefully, my suggestions will get the thought processes going.

In this series I’m looking at the difference between words that seem intellectual as opposed to those that evoke a more emotional response. How you use them is obviously up to you. The point is that the alternatives have the same, or very similar, meanings, but their effect upon the reader can be markedly different. I’ve made some suggestions here, but I’m sure you can think of others.

Intellectual: Attractive

Emotional: Good Looking

‘Regardless of how attractive you find her, she is not considered suitable marriage material by your father, Brian.’

‘She’s a good looking girl, Bri. I can see why you’d want to be with her.’

Intellectual: Garment

Emotional: Dress, Skirt, Shirt

‘That garment is hardly suitable for the workplace, Miss Divine.’

‘Wow! That miniskirt really suits you, Di.’

Intellectual: Perceive

Emotional: See

‘I perceive a change in the manner of your relationship with that young woman.’

‘I can see you’re completely infatuated with that girl.’

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Stuart's Daily Word Spot: That or which?

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That or which?

Much has been said and written about the usage of these two words and I could spend paragraphs in explanation. However, for most purposes the following illustration should suffice. I'll refer you to Fowler or your favourite grammarian for a more detailed exposition.

'That' is used in a restrictive sense; i.e. it identifies one object among many, pointing out the item that has a specific characteristic. So, 'A mini-skirt that is short…' tells the reader that you are referring to the one skirt, amongst the many, that is notable because of its lack of length. It's probably worth pointing out here that there is no comma dividing the object from the description.

'Which', however, is used in a non-restrictive way; i.e. it points to a single item possessing the specified quality. So, 'A mini-skirt, which is short…' tells the reader that the skirt is short, without comparing it to any other. Note also that the object and its description are separated by a comma.

So, to enlarge on the examples in a way that will hopefully illustrate the point more fully:

'A mini-skirt that is short is bound to draw more male eyes than a mini-skirt of normal length.'

'A mini-skirt, which is always short, will cover very little of the legs.'

In the first example, if the words 'that is short' are excluded the sentence has a different meaning. The restrictive clause 'that is short' is crucial to the real meaning of the sentence.

But, in the second example, if the words 'which is always short' are missed out, the sentence means the same thing. The non-restrictive clause 'which is always short' merely adds a bit of information to the sentence without altering its meaning.

Probably, therefore, the easiest way to remember when to use 'that and when 'which' is more appropriate, is to decide whether you could ditch the clause. You can ditch the 'which' but lose the 'that' and you'll look a prat.

27 September 1988 I married my wonderful wife, Valerie. We've been very happy ever since.

27 September 1981 The first TGV high speed train journey took place in France.